I know this needs a lot of work. It has a little bit of an identity crisis going on right now, due in no small part to the fact that I'm pretty sure I haven't gotten the actual story here yet. I have plans to keep going back until I do, however.
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"Model railroading is a hobby that, once people get interested in it, especially like say if they're older than thirteen and they're interested in it, they tend to stay interested in it their entire lives," Mark Tomlonson tells me, over a can of pop (his) and a bottle of water (mine). We're sitting in the workroom-slash-library-slash-office of the Kalamazoo Model Railroad Historical Society. Despite the rain outside, the light coming into the room is bright. The air smells of the paint Mark was using on model train cars when I arrived.
The Kalamazoo Model Railroad Historical Society is really difficult to find. Located on Riverview Drive, to the north and east of Kalamazoo proper, reaching it involves driving through the small town of Parchment, Michigan, past a series of pre-fab houses with dirt-cheap rent and beautiful mansions alike, past Triple H, an airfield where stunt planes fly in twice a year, to a blink-and-you'll-miss-it driveway located in the middle of a sharp bend in the road. The first time I drove out to KMRHS, I missed it once. The last time I drove out, I missed it twice.
The driveway is long, marked only by a wooden contraption reminiscent of a hanging tree with a hand-lettered sign on top reading simply "KMRHS." The building at the end is unassuming, save for the large red caboose parked just outside, behind a transplanted Railroad Crossing warning post. It has been the home of the Society since 1971, when the Kalamazoo Model Railroading Club moved out of its 20-year home in founding member Maury Highler's basement.
Inside the main entrance, however, is a true work of art: just over 212 feet of track laid out in a 20 feet by 40 feet area. There are tunnels and mountains, cities and shipping yards. Every bit of the scenery is accurate up to the year 1960 – hence the historical in the title of this organization – and all the trains are connected to a digital command center that helps coordinate everything. There are multiple towns, stations, and yards scattered about the layout, and during operating sessions, up to seven trains can run at once. The trains they use are on the popular HO scale, meaning that every inch of track on this layout represents 87 inches, or just over seven feet, of actual real-life trains.
Scattered around the layout are tiny little scenes, almost like the Easter eggs found in many computer games and DVD menus. Visitors are encouraged to take a slip of paper from a stack sitting by the wall. Each paper has a blurb reading "The Cooper Park & Eastern is filled with 'mini-scenes'. How many of these can you find? Some of them will take a bit of detective work, but all are in plain sight," followed by a randomized list of ten possible scenes, including the favorite of many members, "The 'Bare' Hunter," a scene where a bear is standing by a hunter squatting over a log with his pants down, and my personal favorite, "Movie Set," where a crowd of people surrounds a Marilyn Monroe figurine – skirt, of course, flying up – standing next to a pink Cadillac.
I email ahead of time to make sure that coming in during one of their work sessions is okay; Russ Barr, the webmaster, tells me to come on by. When I walk in through the unlocked door and pass through the layout room into the adjoining workroom-slash-library, with its paint station, fridge full of pop, and shelves full of books on the history of both model railroads and actual railroads, and full collection of Trains, Model Railroader, and Railroad Model Craftsman magazines, however, everyone is surprised to see me. Russ has forgotten to tell them that I am coming.
They are still flexible, however, so once Mark finishes with his current coat of paint, I sit down with him. He's the treasurer and librarian for the Society. An unassuming man with dark hair, I find out quickly that he is the chief engineer for WMUK when he's not with the trains and literally making sure that the Society – and the track – keep running. I start to suspect that he has a sneaky sense of humor when he tells me about the Amish romance novels his sister writes; my suspicions are confirmed by the railroad history stories he chooses to tell me throughout our interview.
He's also seriously into model railroads. When I ask him how he became interested in model trains, he says, "No idea. I, you know, I – the very first house I lived in, up to the age of 2 and a half, was just a couple hundred yards from a railroad track, and I think that might have something to do with it. But I have no idea what it's like to look at a train and not be interested in it." Later, I will ask if his family has any factor in his interest, and he will tell me that his "dad was interested in helping me, but he wasn't interested with trains."
This lifelong fascination with trains, though apparently the norm – he and David Hayes-Moats, the president of the club who joins us halfway through the interview, both have it. David tells me that he's "always liked trains." Even though he's had periods in his life where he has not been actively involved in model railroading, the fascination has lingered. The same seems to be true of the club's youngest member, a 15-year-old boy who has taken the narrow-gauge track on the layout on as his personal project and completed it, now running that track exclusively during operating sessions. He's been a member for several years, apparently, and is passionate and dedicated.
Russ Barr, webmaster, sits down with us after he finishes painting scenery behind the track that runs through the bathroom. His story is different – although "I had a train set when I was a kid, managed to destroy it pretty good," he didn't really become interested in trains "until my wife dragged me to a hobby show, said I didn't have enough hobbies. I disagreed, but I kind of liked the challenge and a couple of the guys I met – we were really comfortable to talk to, so I built a small layout and joined the club, then abandoned the small layout because I've got a big one here."
However people come to model railroads, the hobby demands a lot of commitment once they become involved. "The most expensive part of model railroading is the time," Mark tells me. Although good HO cars cost about $50 each, with locomotives at around $100, it takes hours to keep trains going. The society has 37 regular members, ranging in age from 15 to 93; the average member puts in at least five hours a week, making sure the track is clean enough, that the electrical wiring is in order, painting cars, making sure the engines are running right, and setting up operating sessions, where a lot of members come together to run the trains based on a set schedule. Every month, the Kalamazoo Model Railroad Historical Society has five set work sessions for maintenance, one business meeting, and two operating sessions.
The operating sessions are very regimented. Trains are set to run on a schedule, departing certain stations at certain times, picking up and dropping off "loads," like flour, at various train yards and in various cities. Some people man the train yards, switching cars and sending trains out at certain times. Some man specific trains, running them from one station and town to the next. One person is always the dispatcher, telling others when they are permitted to go and helping make sure that there are no collisions between trains. Each member possesses a small, leather-bound rulebook with some hundred-odd rules that detail what exactly proper behavior is, for every conceivable manifestation of model railway usage. These rules range what things train operators can say during an operating session (and how that changes if there are observers who are not members in the society) towhich cars can be historically accurately hooked up to which engines and the preferred electrical wiring configurations of the track. The first rule in the book is that model railroads should be fun, and that everyone is to ensure that the experience remains fun.
Still, during our interview, I get the same impression that I got the first time I stepped into the world of model railroading – a train show at the Kalamazoo Expo Center during the last week of October last fall: the honest-to-God point of this society is the sense of community that members get. New members have a probationary period before they become full members of KMRHS, to make sure that they get along with everyone. It's imperfect – at the operating session I attended, two members got into an argument over how fast one member was running his train – but I do not get the impression that the glitches in the system are truly a problem. After all, as Mark tells me, "It's nice to pay the monthly dues just to have some place to go and talk about trains where people don't look at you funny."
Saskia--Great start! I love the quotes you got from the various "characters" at the model railroad society. I also love your description of the place itself, and that you've missed the driveway several times. You have a lot of description, and I think what could really enhance this piece is a stronger conclusion that emphasizes the "so what" of the piece. Maybe one reason that your current ending is a little confusing for me is that you bring yourself into the piece as a character, but we don't really know much about you (in the piece). For instance, we don't know why you're doing an interview, what got you into trains, or how you even found KMRHS in the first place--since it's so hard to find. I'd say either take yourself out or add in these missing bits of information.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you let your characters "speak"--but maybe describe what they look like a bit more. You describe the first man pretty well, but I found myself wanting to know what the others looked like, how old they were, how long they've been a part of the society, etc. This was a great idea for a profile piece!
Saskia,
ReplyDeleteIn the first paragraph when you mention Mark for the second time, I think the rule is that you have to use the last name, not the first…double check with Marin though! There are a few things that I think maybe could be clarified in your narrative like, what pre-fab means. I love the part where you say ‘to a blink-and-you’ll-miss-it driveway’—I think that really worked!
The third paragraph provides some great background but in the fourth paragraph I need some more clarification. Is the work of art life sized? Or a miniature? Does HO stand for something? Can you make it even more clear what you mean when you say that the track is representing the trains?
I loved the mini-scenes imagery where you tell us the members’ favorite and yours as well! I think another explanation point is where you talk about the narrow-gauge track the boy is completing and the use of apparently isn’t effective here, it makes me wonder if he has been a member or not. I love the inclusion of the first rule of the rule book! And in the last paragraph you end on a great quote! Further up though the use of ‘honest-to-God’ makes me think you weren’t being honest before I might reconsider this usage. You have a great start though; I’m definitely engaged and interested!
~Elaine
Saskia,
DeleteI think you have three great strengths working now: content, quotes, and narrative voice. This is a great story and it helps you are so excited about it. I think the center of the content is found in the paragraph about the true expense of model trains.The time these people put into 'just' a hobby is incredible. I think there may be more juice in here than you are letting on. It reads a little like PR right now. I think if you are going to use your own memories and yourself as a character then you must recall the memory when they all fought.
This is a good start on a profile of a peculiar little subculture most of us never think about. You've got a lot of wonderful detail here and the beginnings of strong characters. Like Tanj, you need to take this piece from interview write up to profile. That requires scenes and action. Right now the action and scenes arise from you conducting the interview and it's falling a bit flat. Think about what the larger theme of this piece is and then write toward that. It seems to be about community--especially for those who in the larger world are shunned or made fun of for the thing they love. How can you more fully develop that?
ReplyDeleteSaskia,
ReplyDeleteIt was really interesting to get a glimpse into the daily activities of the guys who work at the Railroad Historical Society. I thought that you did a great job setting the scene for the viewer; your descriptions were really well done. I also like how you weaved in yourself as a character of the story to bring in another perspective. One scene that comes to mind is one at the beginning when you describe yourself traveling to the Historical Society and missing the driveway. To me its almost like the Society is a hidden little secret amongst its members, and your intruding a little bit in their space. I like how that was captured. Maybe you could write a little bit more about how you found or discovered the Society?
However, I do think that the level of explanation of how the trains operate can get to be too much for me personally, and I found my attention wondering off a bit towards the end. Maybe you could consider fleshing out the characters a little bit more by adding quotes from their own words? I was definitely more interested in the people who are a part of the Society and how they “tick” more than how the trains work. Great piece!
Saskia,
ReplyDeleteWhat a funny and well-written piece. It was really a joy to read. You do a great job of setting up the scene in your first few paragraphs. The line about you missing the driveway once on your first time out and twice on your final time out, actually made me laugh out loud. This was a nice way to both establish location and put yourself into the narrative as a character. Very well done.
There are two things that I was left wondering at the end. First, is it possible to talk to the fifteen-year-old boy about his experience there? It seems like a neat story in itself--15 year old bonds with people 4, 5, 6 times his age over trains. I think you could really show readers how timeless this activity can be by expanding this young man's story a bit more.
The other thing that I loved about this piece was the man who's wife took him to a hobby show because she thought he didn't have enough hobbies. That's hilarious! It sounds like a set up of a bad 90s film. Could you expand on that a bit? Could you talk to the wives of some of these railroad fanatics? That could be really funny.
Also, are there only men here? If so, what was it like to be a woman reporter in this setting?
Great job so far!
Alaina
Saskia,
ReplyDeleteThe piece is rather funny write now! I love your navigation to and through the building. It seems like you are beginning to develop relationships with these men and that in itself is interesting and a little bit humorous as their hobby is a bit isolating.
I guess I'm compelled to know your opinions of the train people. (Train people?) You are very involved in the piece yet your opinion is not explicit. There are two ways you could revise you in the piece. I'd be interest in more of your voice or to see how the piece operates with less of you.
I wanted to touch on our sensory descriptions. The smells in the piece are fabulous and you are very descriptive of the sights as well.
Keep up the good work!